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A note about the following: Back when City of Villains was just about to come out one of the members of my supergroup, Top Ten, worked for a Danish on-line web gaming magazine. His bosses thought it would be great to go ahead and have a little 3 issue comic made with screenies having something to do with CoV. I got contacted to write it. In between my writing it and my getting it done the website got sold and everyone got fired! So here is the First Issue ( the only issue) I completed including my notes and asides!





TOP TEN COMIC

"VILLAINS"

by Josef Koelbl III

TOP TEN CAST OF CHARACTERS:

Captain Denmark           Amazing Stu                    WillowWind                    Bzald

Paragon Arbiter              Deja Vu                           Cyber-Blade                   BladeKidd

Lord Nikon                     Quasar X                          Umbral Fist                   knopptastic

Deep Phreez                  Green Lightning                Ghost Mage


 

ISSUE ONE

 

PAGE 1: SPLASH - Full page view of Atlas Park. The sun is shining down on the center of the city. City Hall is the focal point, gleaming in the bright day. Atlas’ statue continues to hold the world safely in his arms. We can see the green grass, lakes, skyscrapers. A beautiful panoramic sight.

CAPTION 1 : Atlas Park was a beautiful place.

CAPTION 2 : It was the heart of Paragon City. It’s lakes and parks held in the safe embrace of the tall buildings that surrounded the zone. And nestled at its center was the seat of power - City Hall.

CAPTION 3 : Here lay the heart of it all. The first stop of new heroes. The halls of research and the gateway to adventure.

CAPTION 4 : Yes...Atlas Park was a beautiful place.

* somewhere on page one we should put the title of the story and whatever other information a real comic would have *

PAGE 2 - 6 Panels

Panel 1 - Interior of City Hall. The foyer, empty if possible. A slight DOWN VIEW showing the seal of the city on the floor and the corridor leading to the New Hero Assignments wing.

CAPTION : Today, it was a festive place. Tragedy had been averted...again and the Powers That Be wanted to show their gratitude. It being an election year didn’t hurt either.

Panel 2 - Outside of MAGI or SERAPH. The angle is such that one can see partially into the room. No one can be seen inside yet.

LORD NIKON

I DON’T SEE WHY WE ALL HAVE TO BE HERE.

The word balloon comes from the open door.

CAPTION : And reluctant heroes always got the best press.

Panel 3 - LONG SHOT capturing all the heroes of TOP TEN in the room. All are standing around waiting to go outside for the presentation. Some are talking to each other (uses those discussion emotes!) WillowWind is at the far end looking into a mirror fixing/checking her make-up. If possible we should have a little box under or across everyone with their name in it.

KNOPPTASTIC

C’MON, MAN...THEY LOVE GIVIN’ THIS STUFF OUT.

DEJA VU

SURE. HOW OFTEN DO WE DESTROY A KRONOS TITAN, BREAK

UP A MALTA PLOT AGAINST CHINA AND STOP WORLD WAR III?

Panel 4 - MEDIUM SHOT of Amazing Stu and Paragon Arbiter from the waist up.

AMAZING STU

UMM...LAST WEEK, I THINK...

Panel 5 - HEAD SHOT only of Lord Nikon. If it’s possible to get a worried look here would be good.

LORD NIKON

I DON’T KNOW. I JUST HAVE THIS WEIRD FEELING THAT

SOMETHING IS GOING TO...I DON’T KNOW.

Panel 6 - SIDE SHOT of WillowWind full body or torso, looking in mirror or case or some type of reflective surface, still checking her make-up.

WILLOWWIND

OH, YOU JUST DON’T LIKE BEING THE CENTER OF

ATTENTION! WE DID A GOOD THING AND NOW WE’RE

GETTING SOME LOVE FOR IT. BESIDES...WE’RE IN THE

MIDDLE OF CITY HALL...

PAGE 3 - 5 Panels

Panel 1 - The storm tossed shores of the Rogue Isles. UP SHOT looking up a craggy mountain to a castle sitting at its crest. The wind howls and streaks of rain fly horizontally across the panel.

CAPTION : The Rogue Isles

CAPTION : (A continuation of Willow’s statement) ...WHAT COULD POSSIBLY HAPPEN?

Panel 2 - LONG SHOT A room full of computers and a few technicians scurrying to and fro. Apart from them are two figures watching the proceedings with interest and an almost uncontainable glee, Scirocco and Captain Mako.

CAPTION : Here, months of work are now coming to a conclusion. Anticipation and preparation have made evil cunning.

SCIROCCO

ALL IS PREPARED, THEN?

Panel 3 - MEDIUM SHOT of Scirocco and Captain Mako from the waist up, the banks of computers visible in the background.

CAPTAIN MAKO

YES, IT IS DONE. LORD RECLUSE SHALL BE PLEASED,

ALTHOUGH I DO NOT UNDERSTAND HIS NEED FOR

THIS ACTION.

SCIROCCO

YOU QUESTION OUR LORD RECLUSE?

Panel 4 - MEDIUM SHOT of Mako only. He sneers, an attitude of superiority practically seeping from his grey shark skin.

CAPTAIN MAKO

I WOULD KNOW THE REASON FOR MY EFFORTS.

HIS LACK OF EXPLANATION IS

UNACCEPTABLE. IT IS DEMEANING AND INSULTING

TO ONE OF MY STATURE.

(Word balloon from off panel) LORD RECLUSE

MAKO!!!

Panel 5 - LONG SHOT full body of Lord Recluse at the top of the stairs leading down to the computer room and his two henchmen. Behind him, Ghost Widow hovers over his left shoulder, a smug look on her face.

LORD RECLUSE

TELL ME, UNDERLING, WHEN HAVE I NEED

TO EXPLAIN MYSELF TO YOU? AM I NOT THE

ABSOLUTE MASTER OF WHATEVER MINE

EYES SEE?

 

PAGE 4 - 5 Panels

Panel 1 - MEDIUM SHOT from behind Recluse as he stares intently at the computer screens in front of him. On the screens are Top Ten, in the room in City Hall. Different monitors show different members from the top, side, bottom, etc. As Recluse views the screens he is still dressing down Captain Mako.

LORD RECLUSE

I SUFFER YOUR PRESENCE BECAUSE

YOU ARE USEFUL, MAKO. YET MAKE

NO MISTAKE...YOU ARE NOT IRREPLACEABLE.

AND WHEN I DECIDE YOUR USEFULNESS IS

AT AN END...I SHALL MAKE SURE YOU ARE

INFORMED IMMEDIATELY.

Panel 2 - WIDE SHOT - Full body of Mako and Recluse. Captain Mako is practically cowering at the feet of the absolute ruler of the Rogue Isles.

CAPTAIN MAKO

MY LORD! I MEAN NO DISRESPECT! (begging for his life)

IT ONLY SEEMS TO ME THAT THESE ANTS

ARE BENEATH YOUR NOTICE. AND IT IS ODD THAT

YOU HAVE COMMITTED SUCH RESOURCES TO

THIS ACTION.

LORD RECLUSE

...YES...BUT THE RESOURCES ARE MINE TO SPEND.

Panel 3 - FULL SHOT - Ghost Widow is standing next to a computer terminal, a smug look on her face.

GHOST WIDOW

MY LORD, POWER IS AT MAXIMUM AND HOLDING

STEADY. TURBINES AT SPEED. TELEPORTATION

GRID READINGS NOMINAL. DEVICE SIGNAL

LOCKED TO TRANSMITTER. THE UNITS ARE

PREPARED AND AWAITING YOUR FINAL

COMMAND.

Panel 4 - FULL SHOT - Recluse crosses the room and climbs the steps to his throne. He sits and his unnatural gaze fills all in the computer room with dread.

LORD RECLUSE

EXCELLENT. YOU HAVE ASKED WHY, MAKO, AND NOW I DEIGN TO

TELL YOU. I HAVE WATCHED MANY OF THE HEROES OF

PARAGON CITY BUMBLE THEIR WAY ONTO THE FRINGES OF

ONE OR ANOTHER OF MY PLANS. BUT THESE HEROES...EITHER

THROUGH DUMB LUCK OR AT THE BEHEST OF SOME

UNKNOWN BENEFACTOR HAVE MEDDLED IN MY

AFFAIRS OVER AND OVER. THIS VEXES ME AND IT

WILL NOT STAND.

Panel 5 - CLOSE UP - the eyes of Lord Recluse fill the panel. One word is spoken.

LORD RECLUSE

BEGIN.

Page 5 - 4 Panels

Panel 1 - MEDIUM SHOT - The heroes of Top Ten have moved out into the rotunda of City Hall. The time for the ceremony is upon them. Bzald. Cyber-Blade and Deja Vu are standing together.

BZALD

ITS TIME, I THINK. THE MAYOR LOOKS

KIND OF ANXIOUS.

CYBER-BLADE

ANXIOUS? NAW, HE’S PROBABLY

DONE A MILLION OF THESE

CEREMONIES. MAYBE DEJA IS

MAKING HIM NERVOUS.

 

DEJA VU

MEN! I SWEAR IF I GET NEAR A MICROPHONE

I’M GONNA SAY "HEY, MR. MAYOR! EYES UP HERE!"

 

Panel 2 - CLOSE UP - on the face of Lord Nikon. He still looks apprehensive but is going with the flow.

LORD NIKON

OH, THAT’LL LOOK GOOD ON TV, DEJA. *sigh*

I DON’T KNOW...I STILL FEEL LIKE SOMETHING’S

JUST ABOUT TO HAPPEN.

Panel 3 - MEDIUM SHOT - Deep Phreeze, Paragon Arbiter look at each other, snorting at Nikon’s statement.

DEEP PHREEZE

NIKON, IT’S LIKE WILLOW SAID. WE’RE IN

THE MIDDLE OF CITY HALL. GEEZ, STATESMAN IS

PROBABLY HERE SOMEWHERE FILLING OUT PAPERWORK!

PARAGON ARBITER

YES. I DON’T KNOW WHY YOU’RE SO WORRIED

BUT THE CHANCES OF GETTING...DID YOU GUYS

HEAR THAT?

Panel 4 - WIDE SHOT - The great hall is filled with an incessant humming. A low "vnnnnnnnnn’ that grows in volume until, in a flash of light, our heroes are surrounded by the deadly robots from the Pretorian dimension.

Page 6 & 7 - 3 panels

Panel 1 - FULL PAGE COVERING PAGES 6 & 7 - The word "ATTACK" is prominent at the left top corner of page 6 in one of those spiky word balloons. The two pages are just one huge shot of everyone fighting the robots.

Panel 2 - LONG SHOT - The "vnnnnnn" sound is heard again but it is lost in the cacophony of battle. Another flash of light, smaller than its predecessor, and a woman is revealed. She is dressed in a business suit.

Panel 3 - LONG SHOT - The woman is seen running to and through the doors to City Hall. Her arms are raised in abject terror and she is screaming at the top of her lungs:

RUNNING WOMAN

HELP! HELP! ITS TOP TEN! THEY’RE

DESTROYING EVERYTHING! MY GOD, THEY’VE

GONE CRAZY!!

Page 8 - 4 Panels

Panel 1 - MEDIUM SHOT - Ghost Mage heard the woman even over the din of battle. He is stunned by her screams and tries to correct her.

GHOST MAGE

WHAT? NO! IT’S THE ROBOTS! WE

HAVEN’T....

Panel 2 - FULL/LARGE SHOT - Ghost Mage, knopptastic, Green Lightning are in the foreground. Behind them a robot is engulfed within the arcing bands of some power, twitching and pulsing. knopptastic is pointing toward it.

KNOPPTASTIC

GHOST! GET YOUR HEAD IN THE FIGHT!

GHOST MAGE

BUT THAT WOMAN...SHE THINKS WE...

KNOPPTASTIC

FORGET HER! THAT ROBOT! WE NEED TO TAKE IT

OUT...NOW!

Panel 3 - MEDIUM SHOT - The panel is nothing but the blast shots streaking through the air. No people or robots are in the shot. If we can not even have a background that would be good. As many blasts in the panel as we can get would be good too.

CAPTION 1 : Power arcs across the field of battle

CAPTION 2 : But which strikes first or if any of them strike at all will never be known.

CAPTION 3 : All that will ever be known is...

Panel 4 - LARGE SHOT - Mushroom Cloud! If we can find an actual picture of one we will put it in here.

Page 9 - 4 Panels

Panel 1 - LARGE SHOT - Ruins as far as the eye can see. Atlas Park is destroyed. I think we can use Boomtown for this shot. Although I think I read on the Top Ten forums where someone had found a screenshot in the files of a destroyed AP with City Hall in ruins. If we can find that that would be great.

Panel 2 - WIDE SHOT - A green force field bubble appears among the ruins. Top Ten has survived! Perhaps, knowing what is to come, it would have been better if...

QUASAR X

IS EVERYONE OK?

WILLOWWIND

OH MY GOD...WE HAVE TO LOOK FOR SURVIVORS!

LORD NIKON

WE HAVE TO MAKE SURE THAT THOSE

ROBOTS ARE...

UMBRAL FIST

WAIT!

Panel 3 - MEDIUM SHOT - Umbral, Cyber-Blade, Nikon, Paragon Arbiter and Captain Denmark are standing nearby. Umbral is holding a "HEAL OTHER" box. We can use it as a scanner in this instance. He speaks chilling words.

UMBRAL FIST

THERE ARE NO ROBOTS.

LORD NIKON

WHAT?!? THAT’S IMPOSSIBLE!

UMBRAL FIST

I KNOW. BUT MY SCANS REVEAL NOTHING. NO

PARTS, NO ELECTRONIC RESIDUE, NO DUST.

CAPTAIN DENMARK

THAT WOULD MEAN...

Panel 4 - WIDE SHOT - Looking down on top of our heroes, Umbral’s words begin to sink in.

UMBRAL FIST

WE FOUGHT NOTHING.

DEEP PHREEZE

WELL, WE HAVE TO SOLVE THAT MYSTERY LATER.

WE HAVE TO LOOK FOR SURVIVORS AND

HELP FIND...

(Word balloon coming from off panel, whispering is shock

WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?

Page 10 - 3 Panels

Panel 1 - WIDE SHOT/FULL PAGE - A shot from behind us, looking over our shoulders we see the rest of Top Ten lead by Flame Snake and Urabob. We are aligned in two rows - us versus them - they believe we have destroyed Atlas Park.

FLAME SNAKE

WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?!?(shouting)

Panel 2 - CLOSE UP - Paragon Arbiter, his face only filling the panel, worried look emote here.

PARAGON ARBITER

THIS IS BAD.

Panel 3 - The storm tossed shores of the Rogue Isles. UP SHOT of the craggy cliffs and the dark castle perched at their summit. Same shot as the first panel of page 3.

SOUND EFFECT - Laughter - HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA



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